Review of : Another Soccer Weekend By Emily D. age: 14 Missouri

As I was reading my three mandatory narratives by other kids around the country, this one caught my attention for the reason it had the word "soccer" in it. I automatically thought that I would instantly connect with the author, Emily. But overall I was not so satisfied with her vocabulary and the lack of emotion, imagery, and details. As a reader I would have liked a lot more sensory details and thus that has become one of my top goals when writing my own narrative this week. In order for that to happen, I know I'm going to have to write about something more meaningful and personal. So i got my work cut out for me and have a bit better comprehension of what I need to do. But I would have to say good job Emily and thanks for the inspiration :)